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To: jbarnes@grpress.com, jagar@grpress.com
Subject: Express Disapproval of the Grand Rapids Press' Coverage of Antiwar March
Arrives at Ehlers' Door" that covered the antiwar march in Grand Rapids on March 17.
The article is framed in the first paragraph with a variety of statements that come across with no focus. The early part of the article has comments from two people who attended the protest, but neither of their comments reflect why people were at the march. Instead, the comments are things like "there's no question this war is a disaster." The article also mentions that most motorists had positive responses to the demonstration. However, the only motorist cited was someone who had a negative comment.
The story then talks about the march moving to the house of Congressman Ehlers. There are no comments from any of the demonstrators or the organizers of the march, although the article does cite a flyer that was distributed to residents of that neighborhood about Ehlers' position on the war in Iraq. The only people who are sourced are Ehlers and a neighbor, both on their reaction to the protest. Both Ehlers and his neighbor make claims that are not verified by the Grand Rapids Press. Ehlers says he based his initial vote on the war with "faulty evidence" and that "it was a mistake." However, the Press lets Ehlers' statement stand without exploring his voting record. Such an exploration would have shown that while Ehlers might think that his vote was a "mistake," that this is largely irrelevant given the fact that Ehlers has consistently voted to fund the war.
The last section of the story dealt with the arrests made and the Press frames this section by stating "The trouble started minutes later...." The police are cited with claims about what happened as well as comments from a witness who had a different point of view. It is unclear what exactly transpired as the two interpretations of the event were diametrically opposed.
I am disappointed that your article failed to look at Representative Ehlers' support of the war and I hope that in the future you explore his voting record more thoroughly in relation to the Iraq War.
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To: jbarnes@grpress.com, jagar@grpress.com
Subject: Express Disapproval of the Grand Rapids Press' Coverage of Antiwar March
Arrives at Ehlers' Door" that covered the antiwar march in Grand Rapids on March 17.
The article is framed in the first paragraph with a variety of statements that come across with no focus. The early part of the article has comments from two people who attended the protest, but neither of their comments reflect why people were at the march. Instead, the comments are things like "there's no question this war is a disaster." The article also mentions that most motorists had positive responses to the demonstration. However, the only motorist cited was someone who had a negative comment.
The story then talks about the march moving to the house of Congressman Ehlers. There are no comments from any of the demonstrators or the organizers of the march, although the article does cite a flyer that was distributed to residents of that neighborhood about Ehlers' position on the war in Iraq. The only people who are sourced are Ehlers and a neighbor, both on their reaction to the protest. Both Ehlers and his neighbor make claims that are not verified by the Grand Rapids Press. Ehlers says he based his initial vote on the war with "faulty evidence" and that "it was a mistake." However, the Press lets Ehlers' statement stand without exploring his voting record. Such an exploration would have shown that while Ehlers might think that his vote was a "mistake," that this is largely irrelevant given the fact that Ehlers has consistently voted to fund the war.
The last section of the story dealt with the arrests made and the Press frames this section by stating "The trouble started minutes later...." The police are cited with claims about what happened as well as comments from a witness who had a different point of view. It is unclear what exactly transpired as the two interpretations of the event were diametrically opposed.
I am disappointed that your article failed to look at Representative Ehlers' support of the war and I hope that in the future you explore his voting record more thoroughly in relation to the Iraq War.
Your Name
Your Organization
123 Your St.
Yousville, YO 12345
Phone: (123)456-7890
Fax: (123)456-7890x123
p.s.
Your Personal Statement
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